June 24, 2008

Sick Haiku

ears underwater
it’s only 3:33
want much couch right now

low, strange mumbling sound
how long have you been talking?
I don’t... wait, what now?

do not have time for mono,
cold, flu, polio
let it be something else please

4 comments:

Mamaclsn said...

Japanese Fighting Sickness!

The fact that you are posting in Haiku may be cause for concern. If you suddenly have the urge to eat with chopsticks or buy a silk robe, I would seek medical attention immediately.

Dann Rafferty said...

That last one is incorrect.

It's in 7-5-7, instead of 5-7-5.
I'm afraid you've made a small haikuian error, my dear.

Sincerely,

Dr. Aloysius Awesome,
King of Haikus

Sarah Beedoo said...

Actually, the syllable rule is pretty flexible; the original Japanese Haiku had seventeen sounds, but far more syllables when translated into English. Wikipedia it.

Also: sick, unsympathetic bastard.

Anonymous said...

Sarah's right. The syllable rule really only counts when you're writing in Japanese.

However, the defining characteristic of a Haiku is that there is a twist at the end which reveals something about the Haiku, and life in general.

--Action Jackson of Poetry